You there—
Raising your lips
Pinning them to your cheeks
They bulge and hide your eyes
Rows of white exposed
You ask me why
I do not do the same
You speak—
Here they are
Enjoy
This is to tell you I am content
I like life I like my life
It is good to me He is good to me
Whoever he is
I am lucky
And I am stable
And so—
With reluctance
Here are my white rows
My busting cheeks
My bright red encasement
Framing my ivory towers
Here is what is left of my sight
My pupils strain to peek over these rounds
And yet—
I feel these obstructed realms
Of light, these cradles of color
Say so much more in the way
They are held there
Then these perfect sets of precision
These lined up little beauties
Could ever get across
I like your use of imagery. The diction is very consistent throughout the whole, and your voice is apparent. The ending is somewhat confusing however, i see a shift occur but it is hard to pinpoint what that shift is. can you make the ending clearer.
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